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Post by JD Stars on May 11, 2006 21:42:24 GMT -5
Please give me some feedback on just for the hell of it the rp I posted just cause.
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Sickle
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Post by Sickle on May 13, 2006 21:36:50 GMT -5
not too bad. I would have given more description of the severed head to let the reader really get an idea of what it looked like. Let the reader feel like they are walking with JD Stars watching the head, the scenery, and JD Stars all interact with one another.
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